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Simply thrilling! Here is my little test! The first paragraph is from the Hobbit by JRR Tolkien! The second is the rewritten one!

1st. In a hole in the ground there lived a hobbit. Not a nasty dirty wet hole filled with the ends of worms and an oozy smell not yet a dry bare sandy hole with nothing in it to sit down on or to eat. It was a hobbit hole and that means comfort. It had a perfectly round door like a porthole painted green with a shiny yellow brass knob in the exact middle. the door opened onto a tube shaped hall like a tunnel. A very comfortable tunnel without smoke.

2nd. In the earth, there resided a hobbit. It wasn't a unpleasant, grimy hole filled with worms and a foul odor, nor was it a barren sandy pit devoid of anything to sit on or eat. It was a hobbit hole, signifying comfort. It featured a perfectly round door resembling a porthole, painted green, with a gleaming yellow brass knob positioned precisely at the center. When opened, the door revealed a tunnel-shaped hallway—a tunnel that was exceptionally cozy and free of smoke. more »